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[traffic limbo]

I wish you could've worked longer on this.

I agree with what most other people have said there - it's a shame this idea was 'wasted' on this animation. From the starting scene you can see the crummy style is more of a 'stylistic feature' than an inability to do better - remake it, properly and see how it goes. The gun was a disgrace, the 3D car was so out of place (and hollow) it was just mental. Great idea, nice direction - just the graphics REALLY let this down. You didn't even draw the crossing dudes, they're imported graphics!!

[Mentos Fresh]

Meh

I couldn't even crack a smile, and I tried. Maybe I'm too old for that humour - but it seems a lit fart is not particularly original these days - and it seems you got to the punchline of your animation then decided to finish it off really halfassedly with a bunch of static scenes! Some running around while on fire, or something, would be much better. also animating the fart coming out. The sound was totally buggered for me, all went quiet and to the right speaker for a while, and the fart sound finished well before the cutting to china etc. was finished - but I assume this is just me since noone else has mentioned it.

If this is indeed your first effort at a submit it's pretty good really, but I didn't bother to submit until I knew I had something pretty decent. (It still only got 2.5 or something heh but lets not get into that). So keep it up, just remember that when you're animating flash, you'll really suffer come voting time if you ever start being halfassed. So say to yourself, 'am I doing a copout with this bit?' and if it's a yes, cut it out - do what you had in in your mind, not whats easier to animate! All the best for future efforts.

ShruggingMantis responds:

I was planning on making it a bit longer at the end, like you said. Unfortunatly, I don't know much about editting sound. All I knew how to do was make it softer or louder, so I had to keep it only 30 seconds long. Otherwise, I would have aded two more scenes to the fart and had more motion. If you know somewhere I could learn more about sound editting, please tell me.

[Habitat]

Very nice

Nicely done FBF there - I know how long it takes, heh. I stuck with a stick, it's amazing how quick you get at it really! Anyway - great music to go along with it, a nice little story - some of your angles and movements and things were really fantastic - I just thought the graphics were sometimes pretty well, silly looking I guess. You need an awful lot of time and talent to get human characters RIGHT though so you lose no cudos there. Adding that bit of colour was a nice wee touch, I really quite enjoyed this little movie - well done!

tricolor responds:

Thanks a lot! I know, FBF is a painstaking, but it's worth it. I'm glad you liked the 3D, and I'll work on my graphics so the human proportions are better. Thanks for the advice and the review! I really value these kinds of reviews.... Cheers.

[Sweet Nectar]

This was fantastic

Loved every second - would have possibly loved more of the office punching guy heh. Loved the 'accuracy' of the commerce talk, halarious. Loved the head heh, watched that about 20 times - fantastically animated I must say! Great voices, great sound, great animation and graphics - this really is a well made peice, well done! Usually I'd find something to recommend, but really you don't need it - you're onto it, for sure.

[Apartheid]

Good, but could be a hell of a lot better

Stream your audio! And have a preloader! Just edit the NG one it's pretty easy to do and it's encouraged - it makes your work look so much more professional, and saves people on dialup like me getting pissed off with having to listen to that soundtrack for 10 minutes until it loads! Luckily it's sorta quiet so I can play other stuff over top of it. Movie wise - the fades are crap they just pop up infront of the dude at the start. However the stylistic colouring with the pencil is a unique little touch there. The frame rate is too slow, the whole thing moves a bit too slow really. Are you trying to portray genocide or apartheid? What's with the pile of dead bodies. The floor moves slower than the stuff ontop of it.

This movie does nothing but give vague ideas of what apartheid is, it doesn't offer any critique. I think we all know it's about separating different people, no need to take 5 minutes showing that when you could show some inequalities or something. It's tough subject matter, and your style is good, but the movie is too slow and pointless.

And you need to learn how to use some very basic actionscript - your movie loops!

[Fields of Vespillo teaser]

Do it.

I don't really approve of trailers, but since it seems you're just getting your sh!t together and this'll be a massive project I'll support this one. Your graphics are gorgeous - this could've used a small bit of action rather than alluding to action and never having any, even if it was just a slice at the screen or something. Anyway, beauty graphics, I think you should go for it. It'll take forever heh but maybe it'll be well worth it! You look like you've got the ability to go hard with attention to detail, and that's the kind of thing that really separates the chaff. If you can keep it up, the completed product will probably get front page, and there's like 100 000 views right there - quite a reward! Get someone with a real strong grasp on grammar to check it before you submit, a couple of missing aposotrophes in this one could detract from the perfection of the rest. It looks great, you've got a perseverence with that detail I only wish I would have heh - best of luck with an actual plotted 'episode'!

BlueEasy responds:

thanks for taking the time to write all that. Missing aposotrophes?!?! Jumpin jahosafett, I completely forgot to do a grammer check! (slaps head) thanks for pointing that out!

[Flystrip 3]

You were robbed

This was a great little movie! Way better than it's rating - I don't know what went wrong here, usually things're rated properly. You have a great cartoony style, it's a great little story, amusing voices, it's great! Pity you killed em off, hehe. My only possible suggestion for a better rating in future would be to crank up the frame rate to at least 18fps, maybe you could also put some buzzing fly noises in there - although they're pretty horrible. A fantastic little flash here, I'm gonna go watch the other ones in the series now - keep it up!

GUTOONs responds:

Well maybe if I name the Flys Mario, Sonic, and Kirby I'd get better reviews(lol)

Glad you liked it, thanks for the tips.

[A fight without meaning]

Hmm

Well you need to avoid using the standard 'blue-black' gradient fill, edit it to 'blue-darker blue' or something that makes it look better. At one point your background edge is clearly inside the stage, need to fix errors like that too. Increase framerate to at least 18fps for this kind of thing. Need a conclusion, or at least a real cliffhanger.. Faster action such as the eyes opening and all that, it was just too slow in those places. Just some stuff to work with if you're interested in taking your flash animations to a higher level - it was a pretty good effort though, well done. I liked that you gave the sticks bandanas and had their eyes in it - its a small difference from other stick movies, which is all you need really to get the originality points there.